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An attempt - RonO's Ramblings

Dec. 6th, 2009 09:52 pm An attempt

Last week, in one of my posts, I mentioned a street whose name sounded like it could be a good title for a song: Camino de Estrella.

This morning, while listening to the leader sharing with the first through third graders about the wise men, I was struck with another line of inspiration. This got my (probably limited) creative juices flowing, and I managed to compose a rhythmic poem (i.e. lyrics that don't have a tune -- at least not one I've heard yet).

Here they are:

In ancient days men looked upon the stars
And saw majesty and wonder
In the stars they saw the signs
That led them on their journeys

They set out upon the Star Road
Camino de Estrella

----

Once wise men saw signs in a star or stars
And knew of wondrous birth
In that star they saw his sign
And had to take their journey

They sought him out the Star Road
Camino de Estrella

----

In later days men looked upon the stars
And sought to learn and understand
From the stars they saw the facts
That led them on their studies

They set out upon the Star Road
Camino de Estrella

----

In these days men look upon the stars
And know that they are far away
Now the stars seem out of reach
And none can take the journey

None set out upon the Star Road
Camino de Estrella

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In future days who'll look upon the stars
And see them as their neighbor
Will the stars be our home
And will we take the journey

We'll set out upon the Star Road
Camino de Estrella

The second verse, albeit the one that comes from this morning's inspiration -- well one of them, the first verse has a lot there too -- is one I'd probably suggest leaving out except at this time of year, and possibly for non-Christian audiences... or not.

While I can sing, and have some sense of music theory (10 years of band, many years of church children's and youth choir, semi-musical family and some very musical in-laws), I'm not sure I'm up to the task of writing a tune to go with my lyrics, nor would I have the ability to provide accompaniment (or the nerve to sing solo), so I'm not quite sure where this will go beyond here.

With some dread, I'll welcome any comments or suggestions.

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From:ifics
Date:December 7th, 2009 01:59 pm (UTC)
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Very nice, my I repost it in rec.music.filk, or link here if your LJ is open to non-friends.
From:rono_60103
Date:December 7th, 2009 02:47 pm (UTC)
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I'd be honored.